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SPEED WRITE: INFORMATION REPORT ON STARS

This is my ABC world cloud.

Today’s learning focus- WALT to write an information report on stars in 40 minutes.

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My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading/title:
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)
My opening paragraph/introduction:
says what my report is about in a clear way
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification
outlines the main features of the subject
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject
give detailed information (factual descriptions)
include specific, technical vocabulary
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found

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Begin Writing Here:

[Heading/Title of Information Report]

[Introduction]

Life cycle

The huge clouds of dust and is called Nebula. Star are born in a great cloud of hydrogen gas and dust called Nebulae.The Sun is about 5 billion year old.When a star is about to die there atoms turn into a heavier chemical.Star seem to be fixed in the sky and differnet timed.The star are

Type of star

A very hot mass called a ‘white dwarf’.There is a star called orion hunter.There is a star called a red super giant.The Sun is a type of star and is a closet star to Earth.There is a star called Betelgeuse.

Appearance

Most star are too small to shine as bright as the sun.Some star are big or small.Small:cool star,big:hot and brighter.Our Sun is a Middle sized star.Star are differnet colours and they also differnet sizes.

SPEEDWRITE: INFORMATION REPORT ON STARS

  

This is my ABC world cloud, for my star 

Today’s learning focus- WALT to write an information report on stars in 40 minutes.

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My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading/title:
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)
My opening paragraph/introduction:
says what my report is about in a clear way
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification
outlines the main features of the subject
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject
give detailed information (factual descriptions)
include specific, technical vocabulary
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found

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Begin Writing Here:

[Heading/Title of Information Report]

[Introduction]

Life cycle

The huge clouds of dust and is called Nebula. Star are born in a great cloud of hydrogen gas and dust called Nebulae.The Sun is about 5 billion year old.When a star is about to die there atoms turn into a heavier chemical.Star seem to be fixed in the sky and differnet timed.The star are

Type of star

A very hot mass called a ‘white dwarf’.There is a star called orion hunter.There is a star called a red super giant.The Sun is a type of star and is a closet star to Earth.There is a star called Betelgeuse.

Appearance

Most star are too small to shine as bright as the sun.Some star are big or small.Small:cool star,big:hot and brighter.Our Sun is a Middle sized star.Star are differnet colours and they also different sizes.

WHY DOES THE MOON LOOK DIFFERENT EVERY NIGHT?

In Week 6 of Term 2 our class focussed on how to write great explanations.We wrote about the Moon’s different phases as we are in the middle oflearning about Planet Earth and Beyond. Learning how to write a greatexplanation will help us with our self-guided topics in a few weeks time.Here is my writing, after I have self-assessed and peer-assessed my work.

Can you believe that the Moon changes shape every night? This happens because the Moon orbits the Earth on a tilt while the Earth is orbiting the Sun. I will be talking about the phases of the Moon.

Paragraph 1

When the Moon orbit the Earth, the Moon shows the same side to us. The sun's light shine to the Moon and this makes a shape. Some people think that the Earth’s shadow is covering the Moon, but this is not true. It is about the amount of the bright side we can see as the Moon moves through its orbit.

Paragraph 2

The phases of the moon is when the Moon orbits the Earth. The first phase is the new moon and it is when the Moon is all black. The next Moon is called waxing crescent and it looks like a banana on the right. After the banana moon, you have the first quarter and it looks like half of the circle. Waxing gibbous is the fourth shape and then you have the full moon. The full moon looks like a volley ball and it is all bright. After the full moon, the moons before are the same but on the opposite side.

Conclusion.  

Now you know more about the Moon, if you want to know more about this you can go on this link. thank you for reading my work.

My Explanation Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading:
is the question WHY DOES THE MOON LOOK DIFFERENT EVERY NIGHT?
My opening paragraph/introduction:
introduce what my writing is about in a clear way
hooks the reader
clear topic sentence and supporting sentences
2-3 sentences maximum
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
clear topic sentence and supporting sentences
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject
give detailed information (factual descriptions)
include specific, technical vocabulary
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)
connectives and time connectives
descriptive language
formal language
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found
write an interesting fact

2015 term 2 week 5: The lumpy potatoes in space.

This is my word cloud about Mars.
I hope you enjoy it 

In Week 5 of Term 2 our class focussed on how to write great information reports.

We wrote about the planet Mars as we are in the middle of learning about Planet Earth and Beyond. Learning how to write a geat information report will help us with our self-guided topics in a few weeks time.

Here is my writing, after I have self-assessed and peer-assessed my work.

Mars has two moons, Phobos and Deimos. They are shaped like lumpy potatoes. Mars’ moons are very cold and Mars is the only planet that has two moons. When Mars orbits the Sun, the moons go around the Sun too. They are much smaller than Earth’s moon. Phobos is 22.2 kilometers and 13.8 metres wide while Deimos is just 12.6 kilometers and 7.8 meters wide. Now I have learned that Mars has two moons. If you want to know where I got this information from you can go on this link.

My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading:
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)
My opening paragraph:
says what my report is about in a clear way
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification
outlines the main features of the subject
My main paragraphs:
have sub-headings where helpful
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject
give detailed information (factual descriptions)
include specific, technical vocabulary
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)